He did pick a good range of cars in the show to highlight on the Autopian.com
https://www.theautopian.com/im-a-designer-who-attended-a-fancyish-car-show-here-are-the-cars-that-stood-out-to-me/ and either has some in depth knowledge of them, or, is also good at researching the ones he finds interesting.
It's too bad his editor is blind, and that he doesn't use some spellcheck software to ask about errors... this was a challenge to read.
"I love me some coupé utility trucklets and this funktastic El Catalina" is quite the odd choice for a writing patter. But, when I read "dramatically sculpted hoof concealed" I realized, no editor was awake at the computer to rein in (no pun intended after that mention of a hoof) this guy's writing.
"With its Kamm tail aerodynamic and only 1,370 lbs to move it pushed this sexy beast to a top speed of 152 mph. During its three years of production, TZ2s took class wins in the 1000 km of Monza 12 Hours of Sebring, the Targa Florio, 1000 km of Nürburgring,6 Hours"
That is an example of no proofreading taking place at all. From a teacher, among other things. I mean - he's a teacher, not that I am. I'm a proofreader. That's not the only example of not using a space after a comma, or not using a comma when needed, or a space after punctuation: "background in various aspects of design strategy, spatial design, branding, graphic design, production and project and team management, in small to large budget projects.Resume includes" https://cms.artcenter.edu/about/get-to-know-artcenter/people/detail.html?breadcrumb=565f1aae4d9b6fce4bd8c5f2&accdID=0110221
" As an articulate concept generator, I conjure the Big Idea but never forget the importance of details." Really? Seriously?
You forgot to proofread before or after posting... so... yeah, not so much on the importance of details.
Why does it bug me? Well, I'm over here, just being a car guy, reading about a car show I like, and I guess I got a bit defensive over the "scoff in the chamber, ready to lay snide critique" and figured if he can state that's his status, he can sure as hell can take in what he dishes out.
I vote for the Autopian.com to get a proofreader, and less Pasadena snobs in the car show reporting. If they want to be droll about 911s, and other similar boring snob cars, fine. But writing for a car enthusiast website doesn't seem to me to be a good fit. Especially for someone who can't spell "Peterson Museum" correctly.

Best rant of the month. Jesse, I salute you....
ReplyDeleteThe writer also seems pretentious and self-important. I don't know if I would enjoy hanging out with him.
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